Nazm Khali hath By HumaJaved

[HumaJaved]

@Kashf

@Mahsa , mery writing style ki wajha say shayad diqqat ho rehi ho gi perhny main thank you for trying to read

 

[Imaan Shah]

buhat khub

 

[Ali Akbar]

apnay deen imaan nou chadeya
per kujj vi nei hathi aya

Althouh "hathi" seems fine... but idr aap "hathy" kr skti hen...

hath'ii apna piar ganwaya
kuj nei mann ley hathhy aya

Here "hathi" is at its perfect place as feels from dialect of poem.

For last line hathy he rehny den.. kuen k ooper bhi yhi use kia he...

I am no expert. Its just my own thought and humble opinion.

 

[Ali Akbar]

Moreover, simple and pure thoughts beautifully expressed.

Well done.

 

[Syeda Rumessa]

Nice

 

[Asad Rehman]

@HumaJaved Bohat wadiya soch
Wadiya likhiya
Saday nal share kern da shukria
@Mahsa sis no pashto vich translate ker k dasna aye

Jesay k @Ali Akbar bhai ne suggest kia
Hathii dono jaga he theek lag raha he

Keeep sharing stay blessed

 

[HumaJaved]

@Imaan Shah Thank you

 

[HumaJaved]

@Ali Akbar apni raye deny ka boht shukria, meri punjabi theek hey lekin urdu say thora sa kum, is liyeh thori confusion ho rehi thi alfaaz kay ist'maal main. Thank you for the compliment too . JazakAllahuKhairan

 

[HumaJaved]

@Syeda Rumessa Adaab adaab

 

[HumaJaved]

@Asad Rehman , do logon kay mashwery sonay pay sohaga ho gea .
Bari bari meherbani tusi apni keemti raay sanu dassi
Aur es n'mani jehi koshish nou pasand k'ran da vi boht boht shukria